once there was a realy old wos women who desaid to go to her garnduter hoses.so she wolked past the markeet and pass the river and in to the dark and stormy forest, she went in the forest and she was not to far but then a jakele just juped out of the bush on the left hand sind of the deep and drke forest then the jakel said old women i will eat you all up then the pld women said in a realy old voise saying and what will you get with skin and bone,i am on the way to my granddoters hose yo get realy,realy fat,then the jakel agreed and said ok go get fat and eat meet me here so the old women gust keept on wolking and then she came a cross to a tiger and the tiger said old women i will eat you all up ,the old women said and what will you get with skin and bone i am on the way to my granddoters hose to get realy realy fat, the tiger agred and said ok go get fat so the old women wokld and came a cross to a big bear ,the bear said old women i will eat you all up the old women said ,and what will you get with skin and bone i am on the way to my granddoters hose to get fat so the bear said ok go get fat and meet me right here the old women arived at her grand doters hose and all that she ever dun was eat ,eat and eat intel she was so fat she could not even wolk,and she sai to wer grand doter dear child thank you for leting me stay i must be on my way ,rena said what do you mean her garndmother said i realy have to go because i promes that a jakel and tiger and a bear to eat me,she said i wont let that hapen i have idia,il putr you in a pumken and food she went royaling dowen and went home safely and went to bed.
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Why did the chiken cross the road ????
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